Fwd: Your name

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From: "Chad Valdez" <cmv2487@gmail.com>
Date: Feb 12, 2015 11:19 AM
Subject: Your name
To: "seth weidenaar" <sethweidenaar@gmail.com>
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The essay of YY does not have a good first paragraph because there is no hook or evidence. The body paragraphs are good at presenting evidence and dwelling deeper.

Fwd: Gilbert

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From: "Gilbert Charley" <gilbertcharley@gmail.com>
Date: Feb 12, 2015 11:22 AM
Subject: Gilbert
To: "seth weidenaar" <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>
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1st paragraph
The first paragraph does not grab attention, although it does present evidence and it answers the prompt well

Body paragraphs
Essay does all criteria well, the essay supports opinions with evidence and uses transition sentences.

Fwd: Katrine Burke

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From: "Katrine Burke" <katrineburke@gmail.com>
Date: Feb 12, 2015 11:23 AM
Subject: Katrine Burke
To: <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>
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Essay YY, interesting beginning, doesn't relaly grab my attention. Answers the prompt well. And gives evidence to prove their statement. Didn't have a good transition sentence between the body paragraphs. Evidence proves the opinion well. The essay has evidence that explains the opinion well and supports the idea. Overall, good job with writing.

Fwd: Shelby Peterson

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From: "Shelby Peterson" <shelbypeterson17@gmail.com>
Date: Feb 12, 2015 11:23 AM
Subject: Shelby Peterson
To: <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>
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JJJ
The first paragraph does grab the readers attention. It does answer the promt's question. It does prevent some evidence.

There are transition sentences in the essay. It does provide evidence that approves the opinion of having romanticism and the myth incorporated into the cover. The evidence is supportive with the man burning and the fire is swallowing them representing the nature incorporated for romanticism.

Fwd: Nolan Johnny

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From: "Nolan Johnny" <nolanjohnny01@gmail.com>
Date: Feb 12, 2015 11:23 AM
Subject: Nolan Johnny
To: "sweidenaar" <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>
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YY

1st Paragraph:

1. The essay doesn't really grab attention but does answer the prompt and presents evidence: 

Body Paragraphs:

1. I'm not sure if there is a transition sentence. (Help??) 

    The body paragraphs show evidence by explaining Pandora's box and he's it connects to the demon and what the demon is exposed to. It explains how the demon was initially good but changed because of exposure.

Fwd: Astrid Gonzaga... Fish

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From: "Hannah Sowers" <hannahsowers97@gmail.com>
Date: Feb 12, 2015 11:24 AM
Subject: Astrid Gonzaga... Fish
To: "seth weidenaar" <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>
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1.  No real hook, but introduction does it's solid job of what we'll be looking at.

2. Does it well. (You either did it good or bad, and at definite answer is preferred :) ))

3. Sure does... I like it how it states what generally happens in the novel to bring up how each element fits.

Fwd: Temera N.

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From: "Temera Nahsonhoya" <tnahsonhoya@gmail.com>
Date: Feb 12, 2015 11:24 AM
Subject: Temera N.
To: <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>
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The first paragraph does answer the prompt, but does not clearly present evidence about how it does.

The body paragraph does not have any transition sentences, but does provide some evidence within the paragraph that do support the opinion of the critic.