Fwd: Your name

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Date: Feb 12, 2015 11:19 AM
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The essay of YY does not have a good first paragraph because there is no hook or evidence. The body paragraphs are good at presenting evidence and dwelling deeper.

Fwd: Gilbert

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1st paragraph
The first paragraph does not grab attention, although it does present evidence and it answers the prompt well

Body paragraphs
Essay does all criteria well, the essay supports opinions with evidence and uses transition sentences.

Fwd: Katrine Burke

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Essay YY, interesting beginning, doesn't relaly grab my attention. Answers the prompt well. And gives evidence to prove their statement. Didn't have a good transition sentence between the body paragraphs. Evidence proves the opinion well. The essay has evidence that explains the opinion well and supports the idea. Overall, good job with writing.

Fwd: Shelby Peterson

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JJJ
The first paragraph does grab the readers attention. It does answer the promt's question. It does prevent some evidence.

There are transition sentences in the essay. It does provide evidence that approves the opinion of having romanticism and the myth incorporated into the cover. The evidence is supportive with the man burning and the fire is swallowing them representing the nature incorporated for romanticism.

Fwd: Nolan Johnny

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YY

1st Paragraph:

1. The essay doesn't really grab attention but does answer the prompt and presents evidence: 

Body Paragraphs:

1. I'm not sure if there is a transition sentence. (Help??) 

    The body paragraphs show evidence by explaining Pandora's box and he's it connects to the demon and what the demon is exposed to. It explains how the demon was initially good but changed because of exposure.

Fwd: Astrid Gonzaga... Fish

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1.  No real hook, but introduction does it's solid job of what we'll be looking at.

2. Does it well. (You either did it good or bad, and at definite answer is preferred :) ))

3. Sure does... I like it how it states what generally happens in the novel to bring up how each element fits.

Fwd: Temera N.

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The first paragraph does answer the prompt, but does not clearly present evidence about how it does.

The body paragraph does not have any transition sentences, but does provide some evidence within the paragraph that do support the opinion of the critic. 

Fwd: Christian Bitsoi

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Essay JJJ

It's grabs the reader 

It doesn't answer the prompt

No evidence; just picture detail

Does talk in clear and understandable sentences

Supported by the prompt

Has easy understanding sentences to generalize what the essay is about

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<</:Jack_Cayman:\>>

Fwd: Amber Kruis

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The first paragragh does answer the promt and provide evidence, however,it doesnt necessarily grab the readers attention. 

The body paragrapgs do use transition sentences and do a good job of providing evidence to back up the essays opinion. The evisence supports the opinion by goving direct exaples of the relation between elemets in the drawing and element in FRANKENSTEIN.

Fwd: Trace

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JJJ
1. The 1st paragraph answers the question and it supports its self.
2. The body and the conclusion are good they. Talk about the picture and how it relates back to the book.
Good Essay. 😁

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Fwd: Shannon

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Date: Feb 12, 2015 11:25 AM
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JJJ

1st paragraph:
1) Does not have a hook which does not grab attention well.
2) Answers question clearly and thought out.

Body paragraphs:
1) Has transition sentences.
2) Has decent evidence using characters and symbols to represent the story


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Fwd: McKenzie Dunson

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YY
1. Yes, this essay grabs attention by saying that there is a different, yet important, aspect of Frankenstein.
2. Yes, says that it makes use of romantic imagination that represents am aspect of Frankenstein well
3. Shows "evidence" by assuming the connection between promethius  and Frankenstein.

Body
1. Has okay transition sentences.
2. Shows evidence through summary and analysis.
3. Representation of the demoms and humans exposure to evil by the box. Demon was not evil at first but he has been exposed to evil by his creator.

Fwd: YY

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Date: Feb 12, 2015 11:25 AM
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The intro paragraph answers the prompt and provides some evidence in analyzing the effect of the books cover. 

The body paragraphs both have good evidence and provide and explanation for the evidence they presented. However, there is no transition sentence from one paragraph to the next.

Fwd: Bobbi Padilla

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I

1. No

2. Yes

3. Yes

II

1. Yes

2. Yes

3. The evidence shows that Kyra's drawn cover displays the story of Frankenstein well since it uses aspects of the Promethean Myth and Romanticism.

Fwd: Matthew Cope

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Essay YY's introduction answers the prompt and provides initial evidence without the use of a hook.  The body of the essay does not really have transition sentences, but it doesn't really need them because it is one paragraph. It presents good supporting evidence that connects the elements on the cover to the demon's experiences.

Fwd:

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YY

There is no catch phrase but the idea is pointed out. Writer connects the evidence really well and goes in depth with Frankenstein. The essay appear unfinished due to no conclusion.

Fwd: another book cover

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Hannah Sowers

You've gotta click this link to view Hannah's cover.

cover

Fwd: frankenstein cover

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Fwd: Cover

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Fwd: Cover trace

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Fwd:

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Fwd: Katrine Burke Frankenstein Picture

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Fwd: Romanticism - Picture

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>>{[Jack_Cayman]}<<

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Fwd: Book Cover

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Book for Mart Shelley's Frankenstein.

Fwd: Frankenstein Cover

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Date: Feb 5, 2015 11:33 PM
Subject: Frankenstein Cover
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Sorry that it is not quite finished. I got a little carried away haha. Anyway, here's my idea for the cover for Frankenstein! :) Also, I apologize for the lateness of this email.
-Sincerely, Bobbi Padilla

Fwd: Frankenstein book cover from Kidist

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Carol Bremer-Bennett

Fwd: Temera's book cover collage

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Fwd: McKenzie Dunson

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AAA
1. In a work filled with doppelgangers, Shelley alludes to the idea that Victor Frankenstein is himself God's doppelganger.
2. God and Victor are opposites
         Quotes "Beautiful yet terrific"
         The evidence is somewhat convincing
3. Thinks of himself more highly than others. Sums up thoughts and restated info
4. 7

DDD
1. Mary Shelley wrote this passage wanting you to feel the fear Victor is having.
2. Through imagery
        Quotes "I had turned loose into the world a depraved wretch whose delight was in carnage and misery"
        No there is not sufficient evidence to convince the reader
3. No, this essay is very vague and scattered.
4. 4 or 5

Fwd: Katrine Burke

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Subject: Fwd: Katrine Burke
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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:26 AM
Subject: Katrine Burke
To: sweidenaar@rcsnm.org

Essay FF
1. The first sentence is the thesis.
2. Each paragraph gives proof towards the thesis.
3. A quote in each paragraph
4. Evidence is convincing.
5. The conclusion sums up the essay nicely.
6. On a 1-9 scale, the essay scores a 6.

Essay LLLL
1. The thesis is the first sentence
2. The thesis is proved in the body paragraphs.
3. Quotes in each paragraph
4. Wonderfully convincing
5. Only had one sentence ad the conclusion. Doesn't sum the essay up.
6. Scored a 5 on a 1-9 scale.

Fwd: Katrine Burke

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:26 AM
Subject: Katrine Burke
To: sweidenaar@rcsnm.org

Essay FF
1. The first sentence is the thesis.
2. Each paragraph gives proof towards the thesis.
3. A quote in each paragraph
4. Evidence is convincing.
5. The conclusion sums up the essay nicely.
6. On a 1-9 scale, the essay scores a 6.

Essay LLLL
1. The thesis is the first sentence
2. The thesis is proved in the body paragraphs.
3. Quotes in each paragraph
4. Wonderfully convincing
5. Only had one sentence ad the conclusion. Doesn't sum the essay up.
6. Scored a 5 on a 1-9 scale.

Fwd: Trace

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:27 AM
Subject: Trace
To: sweidenaar@rcsnm.org


AAA: 1. The first sentence. It's decent.
2. Evidence is good but this person is not talking about imagery, selection of details or allusion.
3. Short just not really feeling convinced
4. 5

DDD
1. The third sentence. Good to the point.
2. Good evidence and support. And of reference to the story. Convinced
3. Good conclusion even had a quote good summary
4. 8

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Fwd: Gilbert

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:28 AM
Subject: Gilbert
To: seth weidenaar <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>

FF
1. Mary Shelley gives the reader a very vivid and clear description of Victor being terrified and shaken through imagery, selection of details, hyperboles and allusions.
On a scale from 1-10 thesis gets 7

2. Writer quotes several times with supporting details for thesis. Evidence is convincing, the writing expands on all the thesis topics

3. Conclusion does sum up the evidence well, provides a snapshot of how Victor's attitude was portrayed.

4. 5-6

LLLL
1.Mary Shelley shows the characterization of Victor though imagery, detail and hyperbole
1-10 thesis gets 7

2. Essay does a good job of using quotes to elaborate on thesis. Evidence is convincing.

3. Conclusion could be better, but it does essentially sum up the evidence

4. 5

Fwd: Nolan Johnny

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AAA. 

1. "In a world filled with doppelgängers, Shelley alluded to the idea that Victor Frankenstien is himself God's doppelgänger." Good thesis

2. Victor feels opposite of what God might feel. Since the creature is evil, it just have been created by someone evil. Victor says no one is capable of understanding what he felt the night he created the demon. (Quotes-convincing)

3. Conclusion summarizes the explanations earlier in he essay, about how evil creators leading to evil creations. 

4. 7

DDD.

1. "Shelley shows just how afraid Victor is of this monster and how much he loathes it." Okay thesis

2. Imager is there to help us feel how Victor feels, "this noble war in the sky elevated my spirits"

Hyperbole- Victor exaggerates his thoughts and feelings. 

3. No conclusion 

4. 5

Fwd: AAA, DDD

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:31 AM
Subject: AAA, DDD
To: seth weidenaar <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>


1 Victor Doppelgänger of God... Everything he creates are evil. Opposite of good.--Good!

2  the thunderstorm lifts his spirit--sign on evilness 

    Failed to understand that because of his evilness so is his creation.

    No one conceive the anguish he is feeling because no one is capable of that.

Has good quotes from the passage imagery and selected details are shown 

3 yes it does an okay Job of covering and summing up his thesis. 

4 score of 5

DDD

1 victory is having a feel of fear --- Okay thesis 

2 uses quotation and selected imagery as well as allusion to convince readers 

3 okay conclusion 

4 score of 4 

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Thank You!

-KBB.

Fwd: Amber

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:31 AM
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AAA:

1. In a work filled with doppelgängers , Shelly alludes to the idea that Victor Frekenstein

Is himself God's doppelgänger 

2. The evidence is really convincing. Quotes are used to show the evil side of Frekenstein.

3.the conclusion sums up the evidence well. Since they are the exact opposite they are doppelgangers 

4. 8

DDD:

1. Mary Shelly wrote this passage wanting to feel the fear Victor is having. 

2.quotes are used as evidence but hey are not too convincing.

3. The conclusions basically sates that Victor wants to be alone. It does an okay job of summing up the evidence. 

4. 3

Fwd: Shelby Peterson

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:32 AM
Subject: Shelby Peterson
To: sweidenaar@rcsnm.org


AAA
1. In a work filled with doppelgängers, Shelley alludes to the idea that Victor Frankenstein is himself God's doppelgänger. This thesis is good.
2. The thunderstorm is "beautiful yet terrific" storm lifted Victors spirits. First sight he is an evil creator since he created something evil.
"No one can conceive the anguish I suffered during the remainder of the night" putting himself above everyone else.
It is convincing
3. It does sum up the evidence- he is evil/ created evil thing. God is good and and his creation is good.
4. 7

DDD
1. Shelley shows just how afraid Victor is of this monster and how much he loathes it
2." This noble war in the sky elevated my spirits" he is frightened
Describes how gigantic and grotesque the monster is- afraid
"I had turned loose into the world and deprived wrath whose delight was in carnage and misery." Miser
Some quotes
Is somewhat convincing but not great explanations
3. No conclusion
4. 5

Fwd: Matthew Cope

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:33 AM
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FF

1. 2nd sentence is the thesis.. It is pretty good

2. Imagery hyperbole allusion details

         Quote- yes 

         Mildly convincing.. There was more and stronger evidence

3. Yes and yes

4. 5-6

LLLL

1. 1st sentence, repeats the prompt, is an OK thesis

2. Imagery, details, hyperbole

          Quote- yes

          Imagery is convincing, detail and hyperbole is not

3. Evidence- no, snapshot- kind of

4. 4-5

Fwd: Bobbi Padilla

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AAA

1. "She shows that Victor is lost in his own world where there is no power than himself, and all he creates and perceives is not good, but the opposite." 8/10

2. This essay cites details for evidence.

                  -It does quote the text

                  -I think it is convincing.

3. Yes.

4. 7

DDD

1. "Whether it be imagery or hyperbole, Shelley shows just how afraid Victor is of this monster and his much he loathes it." 5/10

2. This essay cites details for evidence.

                -It does quote the text

                  -I think it is convincing.

3. I don't think there is a conclusion.

4. 5

Fwd: Hannah Sowers

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FF:

1."He is terrified and shaken and the reader can see that through the imagery, selection of details, hyperbole, and allusions Shelly provides in the passage" I give it a 4 out of 5

2. The writer uses a lot of evidence to support its thesis. He or she has quotes for each literary device asked for in the prompt and thesis. They then go on to explain how the evidence fits into their argument. The evidence is very convincing 

3. It has a conclusion that sums up the evidence but doesn't quite give a snapshot of all the evidence presented. 

4. Igive it a 8 

LLLL: 

1. " Mary Shelley shows that characterization of the narrator, victor frankenstine, through imagery, detail, and hyperbole." I give it a 2 out of 5

2. The writer has pretty good evidence to back up imagery, details and hyperbole it also explains how they fit in. 

3. It has a conclusion, however it was not finished. It summarizes pretty good the one thought it has....victor is fearful that turns into madness. 

4. I give it a 6

Fwd: Chapter 7

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:37 AM
Subject: Chapter 7
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LLLL

1. 2nd sentence... determined by the rest of the paper. Thought it was 1st.

2. 1 quote (2 totals)

3. Confusing... Where the recap?

5

FF

1. 2nd...okay

2. Interesting, but with long quotes, but at least sandwiched with thoughts.

3. Confusing... and tries to put a twist on the thesis. 

4

Fwd: Shannon

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:40 AM
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FF

1) He is terrified and shaken and the reader can see that through the imagery, selections of details, hyperboles, and allusions Shelly provides in the passage. Rate: Short but good

2) the question for the essay was to characterize the narrator which is answered, and the writer adds the tools Shelly used for the reader. The essay uses text and the evidence is convincing.

3) conclusion sums up evidence and provides snapshot of all info.

4) 8 or 9

LLLL

1) Frankenstein is characterized as deeply feared or haunted making him appear agitated and distraught, almost like a crazy person. Answers question, but does not include the tools Shelly uses.

2) answers the question to the narrator's character, but does not have tools which displays the character in depth. There is a lot of evidence but doesn't have much of the writer's opinion. Evidence is convincing.

3) conclusion is really short but sums up evidence and provides a snapshot of info.

Fwd: Essay grading

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:41 AM
Subject: Essay grading
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LLLL

1. Mary Shelly's Frankenstien shows that characterization of the narrator, Victor Frankenstien, through imagery, detail, and hyperbole.

This thesis simple restates the prompt and doesn't even answer it the "how?" Needs more depth into how the author uses imagery, detail, and hyperbole.

2. Uses quotes "I perceived in the gloom a figure which stole from behind a clump of trees..."

Yes evidence is convincing

3. Yes. Shows the audience Victor's characterization through imagery then reliving his madness through his reactions.

 

4. 6 

FF

1. Mary Shelly gives the reader a very vivid and clear description of the narrator. It is terrified and shaken and the reader can see that through the imagery, selection of detail, hyperboles, and allusions Shelly provides in the passage. 

Very good thesis!!

2. Uses plenty do quotes 

Yes convincing

3. Good conclusion

4. 9

Fwd: Temera N.

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:31 AM
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 Essay AAA

1) Thesis: sentence 1; average thesis, can be an answer but is not the best answer; Thesis says Frankenstein is characterized as God's doppelgänger.

2) Proof of thesis: "victor is in his own world where there is no power than himself, and all he creates and perceives is not good, but the opposite."

- does quote the text.

- evidence is convincing

3) Conclusion: sums up the text, restates info

4) 6

Essay DDD

1) Thesis: unclear, sentence 1; poor thesis, strays away from prompt; thesis says Shelly wants you to feel what Victor felt 

2) evidence is seen through imagery of hyperbole

-quotes are provided

-evidence is somewhat convincing

3) No conclusion

4) 3 or 4

Fwd: Kyra

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:39 AM
Subject: Kyra
To: seth weidenaar <sethweidenaar@gmail.com>


FF

1)Thesis-He is terrified and shaken and the reader can see that through the imagery, selection of details, hyperboles, and allusions Shelly provides in the passage.

Ranking:5

2)-imagery-victor viewing the storm and the monster =his fear

 -details-understand the narrator's experiences -quote narrator  say no one can understand is anguish

 -allusion-reflect Cain and Able

3) Somewhat yes-yes

4)7