Fwd: Bobbi Padilla

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From: Bobbi Padilla <bobbipadilla21@gmail.com>
Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:36 AM
Subject: Bobbi Padilla
To: seth weidenaar <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>


AAA

1. "She shows that Victor is lost in his own world where there is no power than himself, and all he creates and perceives is not good, but the opposite." 8/10

2. This essay cites details for evidence.

                  -It does quote the text

                  -I think it is convincing.

3. Yes.

4. 7

DDD

1. "Whether it be imagery or hyperbole, Shelley shows just how afraid Victor is of this monster and his much he loathes it." 5/10

2. This essay cites details for evidence.

                -It does quote the text

                  -I think it is convincing.

3. I don't think there is a conclusion.

4. 5

Fwd: Hannah Sowers

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From: Hannah Sowers <hannahsowers97@gmail.com>
Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:37 AM
Subject: Hannah Sowers
To: seth weidenaar <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>


FF:

1."He is terrified and shaken and the reader can see that through the imagery, selection of details, hyperbole, and allusions Shelly provides in the passage" I give it a 4 out of 5

2. The writer uses a lot of evidence to support its thesis. He or she has quotes for each literary device asked for in the prompt and thesis. They then go on to explain how the evidence fits into their argument. The evidence is very convincing 

3. It has a conclusion that sums up the evidence but doesn't quite give a snapshot of all the evidence presented. 

4. Igive it a 8 

LLLL: 

1. " Mary Shelley shows that characterization of the narrator, victor frankenstine, through imagery, detail, and hyperbole." I give it a 2 out of 5

2. The writer has pretty good evidence to back up imagery, details and hyperbole it also explains how they fit in. 

3. It has a conclusion, however it was not finished. It summarizes pretty good the one thought it has....victor is fearful that turns into madness. 

4. I give it a 6

Fwd: Chapter 7

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:37 AM
Subject: Chapter 7
To: sweidenaar@rcsnm.org


LLLL

1. 2nd sentence... determined by the rest of the paper. Thought it was 1st.

2. 1 quote (2 totals)

3. Confusing... Where the recap?

5

FF

1. 2nd...okay

2. Interesting, but with long quotes, but at least sandwiched with thoughts.

3. Confusing... and tries to put a twist on the thesis. 

4

Fwd: Shannon

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:40 AM
Subject: Shannon
To: seth weidenaar <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>


FF

1) He is terrified and shaken and the reader can see that through the imagery, selections of details, hyperboles, and allusions Shelly provides in the passage. Rate: Short but good

2) the question for the essay was to characterize the narrator which is answered, and the writer adds the tools Shelly used for the reader. The essay uses text and the evidence is convincing.

3) conclusion sums up evidence and provides snapshot of all info.

4) 8 or 9

LLLL

1) Frankenstein is characterized as deeply feared or haunted making him appear agitated and distraught, almost like a crazy person. Answers question, but does not include the tools Shelly uses.

2) answers the question to the narrator's character, but does not have tools which displays the character in depth. There is a lot of evidence but doesn't have much of the writer's opinion. Evidence is convincing.

3) conclusion is really short but sums up evidence and provides a snapshot of info.

Fwd: Essay grading

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:41 AM
Subject: Essay grading
To: seth weidenaar <sweidenaar@rcsnm.org>

LLLL

1. Mary Shelly's Frankenstien shows that characterization of the narrator, Victor Frankenstien, through imagery, detail, and hyperbole.

This thesis simple restates the prompt and doesn't even answer it the "how?" Needs more depth into how the author uses imagery, detail, and hyperbole.

2. Uses quotes "I perceived in the gloom a figure which stole from behind a clump of trees..."

Yes evidence is convincing

3. Yes. Shows the audience Victor's characterization through imagery then reliving his madness through his reactions.

 

4. 6 

FF

1. Mary Shelly gives the reader a very vivid and clear description of the narrator. It is terrified and shaken and the reader can see that through the imagery, selection of detail, hyperboles, and allusions Shelly provides in the passage. 

Very good thesis!!

2. Uses plenty do quotes 

Yes convincing

3. Good conclusion

4. 9

Fwd: Temera N.

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:31 AM
Subject: Temera N.
To: seth weidenaar <sethweidenaar@gmail.com>


 Essay AAA

1) Thesis: sentence 1; average thesis, can be an answer but is not the best answer; Thesis says Frankenstein is characterized as God's doppelgänger.

2) Proof of thesis: "victor is in his own world where there is no power than himself, and all he creates and perceives is not good, but the opposite."

- does quote the text.

- evidence is convincing

3) Conclusion: sums up the text, restates info

4) 6

Essay DDD

1) Thesis: unclear, sentence 1; poor thesis, strays away from prompt; thesis says Shelly wants you to feel what Victor felt 

2) evidence is seen through imagery of hyperbole

-quotes are provided

-evidence is somewhat convincing

3) No conclusion

4) 3 or 4

Fwd: Kyra

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Date: Mon, Feb 2, 2015 at 11:39 AM
Subject: Kyra
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FF

1)Thesis-He is terrified and shaken and the reader can see that through the imagery, selection of details, hyperboles, and allusions Shelly provides in the passage.

Ranking:5

2)-imagery-victor viewing the storm and the monster =his fear

 -details-understand the narrator's experiences -quote narrator  say no one can understand is anguish

 -allusion-reflect Cain and Able

3) Somewhat yes-yes

4)7